Looks like you already have plenty of readers lined up, but count me among those who would be delighted to do this for you. Congratulations!

That’s a whole other area for a lot of homework. ”

LoL – now who needs to do a bit more of homework themselves?
Jason Alba = already more than one book behind his name (and selling quite well too)
http://www.amazon.com/s/ref=ntt_athr_dp_sr_1?_encoding=UTF8&sort=relevancerank&search-alias=books&field-author=Jason%20Alba

Karin H

You probably have some brilliant ideas to share. At least you’re smart enough to ask for reader responses before you publish, and that’s a good sign. The last time I was an employee, I was test-marketing books, so I know what a difference that can make.

And I trust you genuinely want to know everything you can, on your way to creating the best book possible, so I’ll tell it to you straight.

My first response: Groan. You wouldn’t be the first to bury the intention of a profound message somewhere under tediously boring dialogue, but I always want to send the author an invoice; reading them requires way too much mental editing.

I find this genre itself doubly problematic: you have to offer that profound message AND write passable fictional dialogue. Most talented novelists would never attempt it. Have you ever noticed that in the movies, people hang up phones without ever saying goodbye? They cut the real-life boring stuff. You did start with a good line, but then got bogged down with description that doesn’t matter.

And you are the Jason? That’s really awkward. Did some English teacher forbid you to use “I”? I’ll bet the whole book would be better if you just told us what you know and how you learned it, and shared some stories along the way–the way you’d share it in a speech, not in a play.

Dialogue makes a great seasoning, but unless you’re a playwright, you only need a touch of it here and there.

On another note, if you want your book widely distributed, then you’re going to need a book distributor and most likely a regular publisher. That’s a whole other area for a lot of homework.

Congratulations on having the courage to ask. It’s always better for one to hear the news up front–before spending a life’s savings on a garage filled with books. Best wishes.